ALL OF THE LOVE THAT YOU NEVER FELT

JUST HOLD ON AND TIME WILL GIFT YOU WELL

I would fit it into the last part of the song, like this:

Adrift a vessel into the never
Undisputed just like the violent weather
Violent weather

Inhale, breathe it in
Reveal, reveal

Assembled by hands with a vision to find reason without religion
Have you ever thought that the world could be wrong?
The most intelligent minds never sit on the throne

Crooked motion has swayed us back
We will turn around the acceptance that we lack

Fall deeper with me
The further we fall the more beauty we'll see (Reveal)
Fall deeper with me
The further we fall the more beauty we'll see (Reveal)
The modern unveiling is here (Reveal)
The modern unveiling is here
(Inhale now)

Inhale now, breathe it in
Inhale now, breathe it in
The unveiling is here

It's time to retrace our steps and walk a new direction
I'm sick of losing ground and absence of progression
I'm sick of passed down beliefs, every generation

Uncage the free mind
ALL OF THE LOVE THAT YOU NEVER FELT
Unshackle the free hands
JUST HOLD ON AND TIME WILL GIFT YOU WELL
This vessel leads us to the promised land

The unveiling is here
Inhale now, breathe it in
Inhale now, breathe it in

Fall deeper with me
ALL OF THE LOVE
The further we fall
THAT YOU NEVER FELT
the more beauty we'll see
Fall deeper with me
JUST HOLD ON AND
The further we fall
TIME WILL TREAT…YOU…
the more beauty we'll
see
WELL! (scream fades out until the end of the song)

Verse 1

It's looking kinda blue

Take my place at the desk

I don't like this

It's the only thing I want to do

Verse 2

Ripped the first, too obscure

Ripped the second, too literal

Ripped the third, too stupid, too weird

Ripped the fourth, ugh, it's way too real

Pre-chorus

Another hour, nothing there

It'll get better, they say

If I tried harder, I'd get it, for sure

Still remains bare

Chorus

In their blood

But then, why not mine?

They put in the work,

So did I...

Verse 3

It's looking kinda blue

Tried a thing or two

Once more, I'll open up the door

With any luck, it won't be the same as before

(fade out)

Bridge

Eyes ahead, it's up and coming

I guess something's better than nothing

I...

Look back, stop tracks

Watch the mirror warp facts

Diamonds turn lead

Watch the unravelling thread

Maybe my light just goes a different way

Maybe this just isn't meant to be

Final chorus

They put in the work

And so did I

In their blood

But then, why not mine?

This one joins the rest

Number 5, same as everything else

I did what they did

Or at least I tried

I would love some feedback and criticism on how to improve this. 🙏 It's in the genre of indie rock, Dm and maybe a tempo of 150 BPM.

the concept of this song is the 3 little pigs and the big bag wolf, my ex is the wolf, im the pig, and the house represents my heart and the wolfs blow represents her dangers. let me know what you think!!
also this is copied and pasted from my notes cause it doesnt fit into a screenshot 😅

Song name: House of Resurrection

(yelling) a whole year was just blown away
♫
i dont know how you can feed off of despair
i dont know how you can be so unfair
i dont know how you can feed off of my fear
this is so unfair
♫
this is so unfair
♫
i wont be taken in vain
this is not what i deserve
youre a wolf in a sheeps clothing
dressed as a christian you have failed your faith
youve sinned against what is respectful to me
♫
little pig, little pig (whisper but progressive volume)
little pig, little pig
little pig, little pig
let me in
the big bad wolf blew away my heart
in a big blow of apathy
nothing but dust that stands
remnants of memories
i cant stand feeling like i deserve
better than what ive endured
i wont forgive you for this
♫
i wont forgive you
for what youve done to me
oh please, let me breathe
you never let me
♫
you never let me breathe
♫
tears streaming down my face
you are so heartless
why did you toy with me
i am not your play thing
♫
so i do what i can to get this bitch away
but relent, she is now a castaway
i cant get away
inhumane? this is insanity
if she cared, why did she do this to me?
this doesnt make sense to me
this doesnt make sense to me
now i must reject the insolent queen
she no longer can keep a control of me
leaning on others, i cant keep away, but why? i cant say, it is not judgement day
hold my hands, i will pray
to that bitch she will see the day
i will have the last laugh
you just stay away
you will feel a great blow
a blow of something great
i will finally be free
i will resurrect
i will resurrect
i will resurrect
i will resurrect
♫ (more exciting metal, triumphant drums, to show hope)

​

Verse 1

You were the lantern on my porch,

Flickering low in the tired wind.

I was the boots by your doorway—

Dragging home what the night blew in.

And the fields were hushed with frost again,

Like they knew how far we’d fall.

I kept hearing your name in the cottonwoods,

But maybe it wasn’t you at all.

Chorus

Under that blue autumn sky,

Where the daylight feels borrowed,

Where the trees let go easy

Of everything they can’t hold.

You were a small, quiet truth

In a world built on sorrow—

And I was learning to love you

But only on tiptoe.

Verse 2

You were a map drawn in pencil,

Edges smudged by your trembling hands.

I was the miles of backroads

You wished you could finally understand.

And your voice had that evening-tide ache,

Like a train that might not return.

Still I carried your stories in pocket seams—

Little scraps of what still burned.

Chorus

Under that blue autumn sky,

Where the daylight feels borrowed,

Where the trees let go easy

Of everything they can’t hold.

You were a small, quiet truth

In a world built on sorrow—

And I was learning to love you

But only on tiptoe.

Bridge

Oh, the moon hung low like a silver doubt,

And I think we both felt it sway.

You said, “Some things aren’t meant to stay the whole winter,”

And I didn’t know what to say.

But your shadow leaned warm on my shoulder,

For just a breath’s worth of a lifetime—

Before the wind carried the rest away.

Final Chorus

Under that blue autumn sky,

Where we whispered our maybes,

Where your heart beat uneven

Like a bird in a late-season storm.

You were a prayer I kept losing,

Still I held you so bravely—

In the blue autumn sky

Where our leaving was born.

Outro

And the dusk took your footsteps

As softly as mine—

Just two ghosts in the wheatgrass

Beneath a blue autumn sky.