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I just finished a draft of my first feature screenplay that I'm comfortable sharing publicly and would love some feedback from fresh readers.

Title: Like a Heathen

Format: Feature

Genre: Supernatural Horror / Thriller

Length: 116 pages

Status: Full draft completed

Logline: In 1985, when a pop star is murdered at a high-school pep rally, trapped students must escape a cult that controls minds through music, before its ritual consumes the entire school.

The story is set at a New England high school and starts with an ’80s teen-movie feel before moving increasingly into supernatural horror. Music is a major part of both the story and the mythology.

This has been through several structural, character, and compression passes, so I’m mostly looking for fresh-reader reactions. I’d especially appreciate feedback on whether the pacing holds at 116 pages, whether the characters and relationships feel distinct and believable, whether the mythology is clear without being overexplained, whether the escalation in the horror works, and whether the major reveals and climax feel earned.

I’m also particularly interested in feedback on the dialogue. Do the characters sound distinct from one another? Does the banter feel natural rather than overly written? Do the emotional conversations feel specific to the characters, and are there places where the dialogue feels expositional, on-the-nose, repetitive, or tonally out of place?

Also interested in anything that feels confusing, overwritten, unintentionally funny, predictable, or just boring. No need to address everything. I’m mainly interested in where your attention drops or something doesn’t work.

Script: Google Drive PDF

Title: Something Quite Peculiar

Pages: 4

Genre: Cosmic / Psychological horror

Logline: After spotting a stranger with his exact face on his way home from work, Joel follows him and begins documenting his encounters which get increasingly weirder.

Would appreciate feedback on any aspect!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1N2ut-7BzK-EcVsZ-mkQEQwwIUhdz_oll/view?usp=drivesdk

Hey everyone,

I'm an independent screenwriter looking for honest feedback on my feature screenplay, INVERTED CROWN.

It's a high-concept thriller with fantasy elements, combining a surreal karmic realm with grounded human drama and futuristic AI medicine.

The story follows a mute young man who inherits the Eye of Justice, connecting the injustices he witnesses in the real world to a metaphysical realm governed by absolute justice. As the lives of a grieving surgeon and a comatose mother become entangled with this world, the story explores justice, family, and the consequences of trying to control what we cannot understand.https://drive.google.com/file/d/1E3c8vkIDx0oHygrN-jIMmUps5eQbizU2/view?usp=drivesdk

I'm looking for honest, constructive criticism. Thanks to anyone willing to give it a read.

Seriously, let them browse scripts all day, hunting for formatting errors, while the rest of us actually discuss stories. Because at this point, I feel like this group is losing the plot.

I posted my screenplay here looking for people interested in reading a story and giving feedback. Within minutes, someone showed up to lecture me about formatting, telling me that posting a script with errors means I don't care enough about readers.

And this isn't just about one person. I see this attitude in post after post: writers and storytellers put themselves out there, hoping someone will engage with their ideas, characters, conflicts, and worlds, only to have the conversation reduced to formatting mistakes.

Let me be clear: I'm not saying formatting doesn't matter. Of course it matters.

But when did formatting become more important than the story itself? When did a few technical mistakes become a reason to dismiss someone's work before even engaging with what they're trying to tell us?

We're talking about screenwriting, not a formatting competition. Formatting is the vehicle; the story is the destination. A perfectly formatted screenplay can still be lifeless, while a screenplay with a few correctable mistakes can contain an extraordinary idea, compelling characters, and something genuinely worth discussing.

And there's a difference between helping a writer improve and making a writer feel like they don't deserve anyone's time until every technical detail is perfect.

Some people here seem more interested in proving they can detect errors than in discovering whether a story has something to offer. They arrive ready to judge, not curious to read. They turn feedback into a lecture and technical knowledge into a reason to look down on other writers.

If the only thing you can contribute is a list of formatting errors, fine—but don't pretend you've evaluated the screenplay as a story. And don't assume that a writer who makes a technical mistake doesn't care about their audience.

We're writers and storytellers putting our work out there, often after months or years of effort. We should be able to expect criticism without being treated as if we haven't earned the right to be read.

So yes, maybe we need a separate subreddit for the “Formatting Detector Bros.” Let them have their fun. The rest of us can get back to discussing the thing we're supposedly here for in the first place: the stories.

Link to my script!

Hey everyone!

I’m looking for some honest, constructive feedback on my first completed feature-length screenplay, From Friend to Dad.

Genre: Comedy / Raunchy Comedy
Length: 120 pages
Title: From Friend to Dad
Logline: When a short-tempered father discovers that his longtime best friend is planning to marry his adult daughter, his world turns upside down. Determined to put a stop to the relationship, he finds himself caught in a series of outrageous situations, family confrontations, and unexpected twists that push him to his breaking point.

I’ve spent a lot of time developing and refining this screenplay, and I’m excited to finally share it with other readers and writers.

I’m particularly interested in feedback on the overall story, character development, pacing, dialogue, humor, and whether the screenplay keeps you entertained from beginning to end.

I welcome both positive and negative criticism. I’m not looking for someone to simply tell me it’s good. I genuinely want to know what works, what doesn’t, and what could be improved.

I’m primarily looking for voluntary peer feedback rather than paid screenplay coverage or promotional services.
If anyone is interested in reading it, I’d be happy to share the screenplay!

Thanks for your time, and I appreciate anyone willing to give it a read!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1rXBJ7AHupYe1jiIu5Xf-4E3YN6_KzqOv/view?usp=drivesdk

I'm looking for peers to review a script I wrote and give feedback. i plan to produce it. and is anyone is also interested in helping make this film, please message me. i'll send a link to the script to anyone who is interested.

HOLLOW EYES

38 pages

Horror/Drama

Four years after the death of his wife, a grieving widower encounters a creature that terrorizes him and woman he finds himself trapped in a cabin with, this creature forces him to face his worst fear. The death of his wife. the movie is very atmospheric, relies on sound and lighting. creature will be mostly unseen. It's a human drama piece on grief, depression, and acceptance with a horror twist to it

Sizzle! .. Pilot.

A desperate conspiracy streamer, spiraling as his medication runs out, uncovers evidence that the world’s most powerful food empire is harvesting undocumented workers for its bestselling processed meat. Hunted by corporate security and dismissed as paranoid, he must expose the operation before his unraveling mind turns the evidence into an indistinguishable hallucination leaving him unable to tell whether he’s uncovering a monstrous truth or inventing the conspiracy that destroys him.

Think “Sorry to bother you” meets “They Live” meets “Soylent Green”

I would love any feedback.

Each standalone episode reveals a hidden cost behind something society considers normal, desirable, or necessary.

One episode might be a corporate conspiracy thriller. Another might be a psychological horror story about family, an absurdist comedy about social media, or a science-fiction story about a service designed to improve people’s lives.

The stories wouldn’t need recurring characters or a shared universe. They would be connected by their perspective on human behavior and the systems people create.

At a bar serving shots of pure emotion, a numb patron meets a stranger.

Looking for honest first impressions on this short. What worked, what confused you, and did the ending land? Any feedback appreciated.

PDF: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1biFMD_gwlLQdZtxyUCAmCO418S2ViUTY/view

Here’s the first short film script I wrote a few years ago. I don’t have enough time or resources to make it right now, but I’ll try to film it at any cost. Before I start filming, I just want your honest review and suggestions. Should I make it or not?

The reflection
Genre: Psychological Horror, Sci-FI
Pages: 6

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1iwclEAig1zbt6TXds59d4ubs3R2fYRFo/view?usp=sharing

I am thankful for your time and effort

Title The Last Relic

Format feature

Page Length 112

Genre Action/adventure + sci fi

Logline An atheist Navy medic grieving the loss of her fiancé is recruited into an order of female relic guardians and must choose between resurrecting her lost love or prevent their greatest foe from using the most powerful artifact from igniting the apocalypse.

(I've never really liked any logline I've generated for this - very open to rewrites)

Comps I describe this as street level Avengers mixed with the Da Vinci Code meet Indiana Jones in a Stargate. It's silly mad fun with a costumed team.

Feedback Firstly i'd like to know how people respond to it. I'm fully aware that it plays with formatting "rules" sometimes. Like to know you have fun on the ride? Anything sticking/bumping? Most interested how it works as a sample...

And on that note, what do you more seasoned industry members think I should do with it? Contests or festivals this would fit? Some particular places I should submit it? This the sort of writing an up-and-coming agent, manager or producer you know is looking for? Other out of the box suggestions>?

Link https://drive.google.com/file/d/1s4T35CfyZoOofkHd4D74aDv-m_HitAb-/view?usp=sharing

Lora, the wayward princess - animation/comedy - 111

Hi! I’m looking for a script swap. I’m happy to read your feature screenplay and give thoughtful feedback in exchange for notes on mine.

Logline:

After a narcissistic, villainous princess is sentenced to a rehabilitation center for defective princesses, she escapes with the help of an aspiring knight and two other princesses, while scheming to obtain a powerful ring that could give her one more shot at world domination.

If you’re interested, send me your logline, genre, and page count. I’m especially happy to swap since i'm looking for sone opinions.

Link:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1QGBhTKhUYPSmR1-Z6gHrUA7L1Pj1fiE3/view?usp=drivesdk

• Title: When Autumn Leaves
• Format: Short
• Page Length: 7 Pages
• Genres: Romance/Drama
• Logline or Summary: When Billy gets stood up on a date his perspective on love is challenged by a stranger he meets at a park.
• Expectations: I've never had the luxury of anybody other than friends and family read my scripts so I'm putting this short one I did to see what unfiltered critiques I can get to improve my writing.
• Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1_MQWYDvdhVyX19-c8p-z9tHyHc9kUtNE/view?usp=sharing

Title: Butterfly Effect

Format: Short

Page Length: 6 Pages

Genres: Drama

Logline or Summary: After losing his mother, an introverted young man forms an unexpected connection with a butterfly, but when a girl next door accidentally kills it, he is forced to confront grief, guilt, and the possibility of finding another family.

Feedback Concerns: I'm still learning screenwriting, so I'd really appreciate any honest feedback on the story, pacing, dialogue, formatting, and whether the ending works. I'm always looking to improve as a writer, and if the script resonates with someone, I'd be happy to discuss it further.

Link:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1jrOiypGSqSIrbgdTZbi3XPk9Nru9LsmF/view?usp=sharing

A darkly comic British Western set in Restoration Britain, following a boy and a highwayman through a country where honest work requires considerable dishonesty.

Logline: In 1665, a twelve-year-old drover forces the hapless highwayman responsible for his master’s murder to help drive his cattle across a divided Britain. On their trail are the killer they left for dead and a vengeful baroness hunting the stolen pearls still in the thief’s pocket.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Fm-JIj0MmoNYA7vYOfy3usx3Z7MBIB4v/view?usp=drive_link

Hi all!

I’m a younger screenwriter/director and I’m planning on directing this script as my next short and was looking to get feedback on anything/everything from concept to format/readability!

Please ask any questions — and thank you in advance for your time and feedback.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1o1LyuHyatCUKvL-sICFjwet0Rht8dWYC/view?usp=sharing

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